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Critique my Resume!
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I've never seen anyone take advantage of this, but in the about this forum thread, it offers the suggestion of posting your resume for critique. So let me know what you think:

Hunter Lee Robinson
Address
Daphne, AL Zip
Phone number

OBJECTIVE
To find a career in which I can best use my interests and abilities to benefit my employer and become the best employee possible.

ACADEMIC EDUCATION
Institution/City/State Degree Year Graduated
-Rend Lake College, Ina, IL A.S & A.A. 2006
-Belhaven University, Jackson, MS B.S., Business Administration 2008

SCHOLASTIC ACHIEVEMENTS
Presidential Scholar 2007-2008
NAIA Academic All American 2006
Deanís List 2004-2006
Presidential Scholar Recipient in 2003 totaling $60,000 in scholarships over four years

WORK EXPERIENCE
2008 to Present
-Crimson Shipping Co. Ė Ocean Break Bulk Shipper (a division of Cooper/T. Smith)
Shipping Clerk

  • Receive cargo from rail, trucks, and barges and organize the storage of material on hand.
  • Tally all cargo sent to vessel by count and tonnage, and keep a running inventory; communicate with operations personnel any problems and/or discrepancies prior to unloading cargo.
  • Supervise forklift operators during loading of vessel to keep the integrity of hold, inventory, or other vesselís cargo secure.
  • Coordinate communication between operations, terminal manager, and dock labor.

Documentation

  • Generate bills of lading, riders and dimension recaps according to customerís instructions.
  • Generate invoices by voyage and bill customers for ocean freight and terminal charges.
  • Book cargo by commodity type, as freighted and assign to corresponding voyages by load port.


Assistant Operations Manager

  • Manage bookings and cargo movement through the Military Surface Deployment and Distribution Command.
  • Log dock receipts daily and recap all cargo received; post all tally receipts to manual inventory records.
  • Create daily updates on booking lists, future vessels, shipments and any future cargo that require special handling and/or equipment.


Administrative Supervisor

  • Continuation of all of my duties as Assistant Operations Manager as well as:
  • Supervise the handling and distribution of all documentation duties.
  • Communicate and coordinate with customers, freight forwarders and agents to provide load/discharge planning and documentation.
  • Provide customer service and resolve issues with invoicing, documentation, booking requests, and voyage scheduling.
  • Coordinate with customers, the arrival of their cargo to our facility and subsequent shipment to port of rest to align with the needs of their projects.




The spacing is a little messed up from the copy and paste, but I believe you have the idea.

Thank you for the help!

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Hunter Robinson
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Re: Critique my Resume! [el_slice] [ In reply to ]
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Objective line seems like wasted space to me - if you're going to have it, expand on the interests and\or abilities that might be relevant to what ever job you're applying for. Otherwise it sort of reads like, "I'm not sure what I want to do, but I promise I'll work hard."

Academic Education - Not being from the USA, I have no idea what A.S and A.A or B.S means in this context. Is it common knowledge there? Would a recruiter know if they read your resume? If not, expand.

Scholastic achievements - What do you gain from putting the $ amount of the scholarships?

Work Experience - Can you break it down chronologically? Clerk Feb 2008 - August 2008 etc to Supervisor Sept 2010 to Present - with most impressive\relevant position first to be read.
If you're applying for Supervisor roles, how many times will people read past the "Shipping Clerk" line?
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Re: Critique my Resume! [el_slice] [ In reply to ]
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There are a lot of issues with this resume and while my experience is limited to my own resume construction I think turning to the masses is a great idea.

Have you heard of Bountyit.com? you can put your resume on there and get constructive feedback for a reasonable price ($5 or whatever you choose). The idea is by creating an incentive people will give constructive feedback in order to earn the bounty because you get to choose who gets all or part of it. I encourage you to put it on the site but if you aren't interested I understand.

Get rid of the objective portion. What did you do in college? elaborate. Half my resume goes into how i was involved in various activities and teaching assistant positions. Overall your resume is bland and needs livening up.
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Re: Critique my Resume! [arose] [ In reply to ]
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"bland and needs livening up" - not going to argue with you. But how would you suggest livening up a resume?

I'll look into that website tomorrow

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Hunter Robinson
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http://www.elslicerideco.com
Sponsored by: http://www.92fifty.com
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Re: Critique my Resume! [tynomitey] [ In reply to ]
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Those are some good suggestions. I am going to post a second version of the resume tomorrow.

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Hunter Robinson
http://www.twitter.com/el_slice
http://www.elslicerideco.com
Sponsored by: http://www.92fifty.com
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Re: Critique my Resume! [el_slice] [ In reply to ]
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I would mostly echo the comments posted earlier, but here it is in my words:

-Get rid of the objective; many people "teach" using that, but I think it is a waste unless you are very specific. You should be writing a cover letter to a job anyways and that is far more detailed and covers the same idea.

-You have supervisory experience; you need to sell this! Not everyone has this and with your other experience being limited this should be highlighted more and not placed last as your work experience.

-Did I read that right that you got your Masters? If so, that should certainly be spelled out and highlighted more.

-General rule is always talk about acoomplishments, how you improved something, how you lead...so always try and word things from that point of view versus just talking about what "tasks" you completed. Of course, if the jobyou are applying for is more task oriented than you could highlight that you have experience in those specific areas.

Good luck with it and I think reaching out is a great idea...use as many people/resources as you can to fine tune the resume!
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Re: Critique my Resume! [el_slice] [ In reply to ]
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Honestly formatting has a lot to do with a resume. I recruited at a career fair a couple a months ago and I can tell you I scanned resumes in 30 seconds and the ones with the best formatting showing me the relevant information quickly were the ones that i focused on the most. The reason I bring it up is because I am having a hard time reading it in the slowtwitch format. Can you post a link to a word document?

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Re: Critique my Resume! [marcia] [ In reply to ]
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How about references? "Upon Request"
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